Fall DWA
In
the beginning the year 2012 Obama cut the Nasa program… Until January
11, 2031, President William Haroldson refunded the Nasa program with a
whopping $10,000,000,000 (Ten Billion Dollars). Williams goal for Nasa
was to fly through a wormhole and make it across the galaxy to find new
life forms. Nasa Put their best men and women to work and trained them
for two years.
In
those two years Nasa sent new projects out… They sent the stumble (a
rover to discover what lies on Saturn’s moons) , the Drifter (a space
shuttle to see if there is life on Jupiter), and the Photosphere (a
complex space probe that would orbit around every planet then fly past
Pluto and circle back to Earth).
Nasa
Broadcasted the start off on every station. The World was watching,
When the countdown reached five people leaned into their television.
Conversing through the sound system “ Five, four,three,two,one. Houston
we have take off!” Everyone was Cheering especially Pres. William. The
only setback was that it would take at least three months to find a
wormhole.
William
waited and waited… Two months passed and still nothing. It was now
April 19, 2033, The ship members were sleeping except for three
astronauts. A siren blared out, The spaceship members rushed into
action! Two men and a women (Dave, Kim, Fred) took their positions. They
were getting pulled into a wormhole. Flashing of light warped around
the ship, it was shaking like the ship was entering into a category 5
tornado! A small asteroid came hurling toward the ship.
The
ship got rammed by the asteroid. The ship members blacked out. When
some of the members came to they saw themselves on a sandy land. They
woke up the other member, and gathered what appeared to look like
sticks.“We have to make shelter!” yelled the Captain,
“No! We need to find what lies on this planet. That was our mission.” Dave responded
The others agreed. The ground felt as if it was vibrating. A member looked up and saw, a vicious looking creature.
“Do not move.” Whispered Kim.
The Beast roared, bits of spit went flinging into the member’s faces.
“AHH!” one member screamed.
The Beast plunged its body toward the members. While the beast hogged members down it’s throat Kim Made a run for it. The beast cornered Kim. All she could do was to let the beast devour her. A voice from behind yelled,
“Over here you big lug!”
“Captain?!” Kim yelped.
The Captain threw stones at the beast. The Beast looked back and lunged its body at Captain, and mauled him. Kim Ran through the barren land. She sprinted and then fell into quicksand. A bigger beast came leaping toward Kim.
“NOO! WHY?!?” Kim cried.
The Beast slashed it’s claws and slaughtered Kim. You can still hear the shrieks of her voice.
I think your vocabulary was high proficient in this piece. Maybe an author's note might've explained the piece more but otherwise it wodas a piece.
ReplyDeleteI like the information you used in the beginning, but I think you could've used an author's note to explain the piece a little better. Also, you should consider revising your piece because I saw a few minor conventional errors. Overall, your piece was very interesting!
ReplyDeleteI liked that you didn't have a happy ending but I think you should add an author's note.
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